Topic: Some people believe that the government should provide financial assistance to all artists including painter, musicians and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Topic: Some people believe that the government should provide financial assistance to all artists including painter, musicians, and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some would argue that creative artists should be subsidized, while others say that this support is wasteful. While financial assistance for all artists can help to preserve the culture and create more quality masterpieces, I believe that it is more beneficial for citizens if this fund can be allocated to other principal services such as healthcare and education.
On the one hand, the main reason why authorities should help painters, musicians and poets is that it could support them to make more quality works of art to serve the public. The funding of governments also conserves traditional arts because they are non-profitable. So that by subsidizing all artists, more creative paintings, songs, poems would be produced to serve local people and visitors, enriching the culture of the country. For example, if Hanoi City Council did not give great financial support for a group of young painters, who created many statues in city centers that have been a landmark of the city for tourists, they would not complete their works within one year.
On the other hand, people, who believe that funding for artists is wasting money, argue that the national budget should be prioritized to invest in the basic services for individuals. This is because primary sectors such as medical and education services will affect massively to residents’ lives if they are out of date. For instance, in many developing countries, people still can not access adequately to healthcare services to get proper treatments for serious diseases such as cancer. By improving this situation, many people will be cured. Therefore, I believe that governments should spend most of their budget on healthcare and education.
In conclusion, although governments’ assistance in arts can help to produce more interesting works of art and maintain the national culture, I believe that it is more important to invest money in other essential public services, which can have greater effects on people.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1874.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32386363636 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82012711225 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514204545455 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5403795597 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.933333333 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336902797858 0.244688304435 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13659218832 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156175958875 0.0667982634062 234% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27137284392 0.151304729494 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.327373065238 0.056905535591 575% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.