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Traditional educational system and new technology based education.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowdays , technology plays an important rule in every aspects of our life. Teaching system is not different from it .Some people think that new technology hampers the educational system. In this essay I will discuss about the advantages and disadvantages of the influence of growing flow of new technology in the field of education system with example.

Lets begin by looking at the advantages of increasing involvement of new technology in education era. Technology create the scope to spread knowledge all over the world that makes possible to ensure vast knowledge in education sector. For example ,in past education system closed in the boundary of books. Moreover all the books are not available not only in every corner of world but also every corner of a country. But increasing development of the technology draws the pave of available knowledge for maximum people which become a great weapon in the education system.

Secondly, new technology help the teachers able to teach a large number of students at a time. Many people live in the remote area where well known schools and good number of teachers are not available .Government arrange many educational program in TV so that one teach can teach a large number of student at a time . Modern technology capable to built the way which growing educational progress to spread knowledge in maximum student in minimum time. For example , in present situation due to covid 19 educational system is highly supported by this educational Tv program .

On the other side of the argument, Technology base education limited the interaction between teachers and other students which create a communication gap between them. Sharing opinion is one of the most important part of traditional education system which enrich one another with their knowledge that is helpful to extend their capability of thinking .For example ,children influenced by their surrounding people or friends .they highly motivated by communicated with their friend and teachers. So, technology based education create a boundary in this case.

Another issue is that, new technology is not available all over the world in same flow so that it is not possible for the students of remote area to get same quantity of knowledge than the developed area. If we looking for an example in present covid 19 situation many student face difficulty in online based education due to sufficient availability of device and internet connection.

All this things considered that new technology create a huge impact in overall education system. We need to weight up the pros of the involvement of the technology in education system and the cons of it’s involvement. Personally I believe that considering some limitation new technology welcomes vast knowledge which ensure the progress of the growth of the education system.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 41.998997996 183% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.3376753507 300% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 1615.20841683 148% => OK
No of words: 457.0 315.596192385 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21881838074 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84036499631 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450765864333 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 769.5 506.74238477 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1480673006 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.25 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.85 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 7.06120827912 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423139045619 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155261818018 0.084324248473 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901979449025 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245025615673 0.151304729494 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0790103733935 0.056905535591 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments