Traditional holidays are getting more and more unpopular among the young generations.”
Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
OR: what extent do you agree/disagree with the statement? Give specific reasons and examples for your argument so that any non-experts in the matter can understand that.
Culture is not only referred as the way of life by a community or a society, but also become a symbol of each country in the world. However, it is said that young people are showing less interest in traditional holidays of their own culture. Personally, I completely agree with the statement for nowadays, technology breakthrough has significantly affected the young and the awareness of traditional holidays is less concerned in most young generation as well.
First of all, development in technology has deeply cultural impacts with countries in the world nowadays. As the result, people can relax and entertain easily in daily life, instead of waiting for traditional holidays. It is in Hanoi of Vietnam, there are many entertainment activities during the weekend, including music concerts, sport activities and even folk games at HoGuom Lake, so it is almost easy for every Hanoians to relax and to be amused. In addition, a lot of people prefer to work in these holidays for earning more money. For example, in Vietnam, Tet Holiday is not concerned as much as before when more and more people have concerned about how much money they can generate during Tet Holiday, rather than enjoying the holiday. In contrast, many people who have to work hard in daily live just wait for the traditional holidays for refreshment and breathing space, they don’t really interest in preparing or enjoying with these holidays. By the statements mentioned above, technology development has helped people learn and understand others cultures more easily, but the traditional holidays are made to be less attractive in the young generations.
Last but not least, it is said that one season is the lack of awareness of these traditional holidays among the young. Obviously, some people disagree with that for they suppose nowadays, it is impossible when people learn traditional holidays of foreign countries easily. It is completely right because thanks to technology development, people around the world can communicate and exchange information with other openly; learn culture of other countries on the Internet or via books, newspapers. However the truth is most young people follow cultural trends in the world without understanding their cultural origin and meaning. It is in many Asia countries, as the countries open more widely to the others in the world, many East cultural holidays, such as Christmas or Halloween day import into the countries. What is mentioning is that a lot of people are interested in these holidays, rather than really understanding about them. Additionally, it is so dangerous that people no longer understand their own traditional holidays fully. For example, it would seem that few Vietnamese people can know full well what Mid-Autumn Festival originate and its meaning. Clearly, when young people don’t know well the cultural significance of these traditional holidays, it is very difficult for them to enjoy and protect them. Therefore, it is so necessary that young generations have to improve their knowledge of cultural holidays of other countries in the world.
Despite significance of culture in referring to lifestyle of a society and sometime representing the best tradition of a country, the traditional holidays become more unpopular among the young generations for rapid development of technology in the last century and the absence of knowledge in traditional culture of their own countries and others as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
...uld seem that few Vietnamese people can know full well what Mid-Autumn Festival orig...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, in contrast, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 41.998997996 179% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2908.0 1615.20841683 180% => OK
No of words: 552.0 315.596192385 175% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26811594203 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.20363070211 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90567060334 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 176.041082164 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447463768116 0.561755894193 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 922.5 506.74238477 182% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.384769539078 520% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4610173213 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.476190476 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.67935871743 207% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209582100253 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0729455198538 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501912813037 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149260484255 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020599012826 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 78.4519038076 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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