It is right that pop singers are paid more than nurses. How far do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Use specific details and reasons to explain why this statement is needed.
The higher living standard of people in the world is the more significant both physical care and mental care become. One question is who have the higher pay for their contribution for society, pop singers or nurses. In my opinion, pop singers are paid a higher salary than nurses for customers’ characteristic, job’s changes and government’s policy.
First and foremost, the customers’ class plays an important role in the difference between pop singers and nurses. On the other hand, some different arguments lay emphasis on that all people in different corner of the world need health care but some of them have relax demand. Obviously, the more people use services the higher salary of server is. However, it is the solvency of customers that becomes key point of salary paid for both singers and nurses. For example, audiences that enjoy pop concert that are businessmen or directors usually have a higher credit-worthiness than the average amount of income of people in the world. As mentioned, almost all the viewers of pop music performances have a high living standard so they attach special importance to spiritual value. Yet, a lot of people must worry about their life everyday so they can’t afford high-price services. In short, the solvency of customers makes a difference, higher salary of singers and lower salary of nurses.
Second, pop singers have to change a lot in their career, more than what nurses need to do. Yet, some different arguments lay emphasis on that changing is shared feature of people in the world. Obviously, innovation in medical technology forces the nurses to change and study every day. In fact, pop singers have to change step-by-step not only in contemporary trend but also in personal style. For instance, the new trends of music that are loved by most audiences force pop singers to follow. Also, each singer has to build personal style and tries other fields in order to please audiences. In a nutshell, higher salary is a meritorious recompense of the difficulties that singers have to overcome.
To conclude, both the physical and mental demand play a significant role in daily life but pop singers that mentally care are paid more than nurses – physically care for the difference in the feature of customers, the change of job and the rules of government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 268, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'relaxed'.
Suggestion: relaxed
... need health care but some of them have relax demand. Obviously, the more people use ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, as to, for example, for instance, in fact, in short, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 386.0 315.596192385 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04922279793 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84147765697 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474093264249 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7553221184 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.578947368 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140223149938 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516578821986 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393096784089 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986882149497 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00481368661902 0.056905535591 8% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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