It is right that pop singers are paid more than nurses. How far do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Use specific details and reasons to explain why this statement is needed.
Salary is one of the most important factors that help people make a decision for their future job. Many people think that pop singers receive higher salary than nurses. In my point of view, I disagree that pop singers earn more money than nurses for the demand of ensuring good health and the medical industry’s rapid development.
First of all, the more developing social is, the more enormous of demand for ensuring excellent health, therefore nurses is more fully appreciated. Obviously, though industry is one of the most factors to develop economic, this leads people to be infected by lots of diseases that is the reason why nurses are becoming more and more important. As an illustration, in developing countries such as Viet Nam, Laos and Thailand, the number of people died of cancer is really enormous. Moreover, hospital needs to extend scale. For instance, in developing country, hospitals are always overloaded and need to be extended. Besides, increasing life expectancy demonstrates people’s interest in health. In short, the enormous demand for having good health leads to nurses’ higher salary.
Equally important, the medical industry’s rapid development directly leads to high nurses’ salary. In practice, some people think that in spite of medical development, nurses have sustainable salary. In fact, the opinion is true because nurses are paid based on their seniority. However, along with the medical is developing, people will more concern about nurses’ living standard because it has direct effects on the quality of health care, so nurses will have big prize money. Actually, nurses cannot ensure the quality of treating with a low salary. For example, in America, nurses is one of the jobs having the highest salary thanks to medical development. Therefore, the medical industry’s rapid development is a key factor that make nurses have high salary.
On the whole, salary apparently is one of the most key factors for people to choose their future job; while lots of people think that pop singers are paid more than nurses, I myself believe that nurses receive more money than pop singers on the account of the demand to improve health and being sustainable job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Equally,
... leads to nurses' higher salary. Equally important, the medical industry's ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, apparently, besides, first, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in fact, in short, such as, first of all, in spite of, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24089635854 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76739359479 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487394957983 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1246258403 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.944444444 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2777777778 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111870561769 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0390407679203 0.084324248473 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542081559004 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0964704962933 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525137018417 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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