Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. This rise moves in tandem with the growth in violent media.Thus, the conclusion can be drawn that violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. Do you agree or disagree?
Over the last five decades, violence among younsters has drastically increased.Several individuals allege that the development of violent media in television and internet and from this, many infere that violent media is rapidly increasing the crime rate among young people. To me, I partially agree ith this stetement, as I see other reasons to this behaviour.
To begin with, there should not be denying of the fact that social media and television are affecting not only on the young, but on aged adults as well. News companies report on newspapers and television extremely cruel content to attract bigger audience. Subsequently, viewers in the face of children- one of the most affectionate part of the auditory soak up the violence from screens on a daily basis. Another striking point is that vicious computer games, which consist of tasks such as killing people or stealing another folks' property promote anti-social behaviour. Thus, children from youngest ages are used to cruelty and vandalism, even though it all is in virtual reality.
On the other hand, the impact of television and social media seems to be trivial comparing to the relationship with society and parents.First of all, it is parents liability to boost children's logical abilities to distinguish what is "good" and "bad". Moreover, hostility and sometimes rejection of children by society may be another cause of violent behaviour, as young people want to settle in the community and after unsuccessful attempts, they go for rigid path to make their name. Therefore, lack of involvement of parents in children's life and inability of society to act empathetically are crucially causing the violent behaviour.
In summary, there is no doubt that violent media invokes corresponding behaviour among young people, however, the role of parents and society also causes this rising trend.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, in summary, no doubt, such as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35472972973 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02461105022 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621621621622 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2333296592 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.090909091 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9090909091 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6363636364 7.06120827912 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302482643825 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101306461951 0.084324248473 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103188116702 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19985851854 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977894598148 0.056905535591 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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