Violence on TV. What is your opinion
Many of us claim that growing violence on TV and in computer games spread aggression on people,while others argue that this type of entertainment has positive impact on people’s lifestyle. I’m inclined to believe that Tv and computer games’ violence does not affect people’s behavior.
First and foremost, I think people act from their motives, regardless what they see on TV or from the computer games they used to play. For instance if someone has a strong intention to harm someone, this is indeed not because of TV program watched or computer game played previously, but due to the given person’s character and violence. As it is considered, the violent media accustomes the viewer to cruelty. I absolutely disagree with this opinion. From my perspective, people treat others humanely irrespective of what they see on TV.
Moreover, video games and TV may even reduce the level of violent behavior of many people. In other words, people fight in their games, instead of expressing their combating spirit in real life. For example, when my son is annoyed to some extent, I strongly advise him to play one or two rounds on his PlayStation and this helps him to reduce his level of aggression.
Finally, every adult has an onus to educate his child what is good and what is dangerous for their future.
To sum up, I want to reiterate that TV and computers are not the main factors that shape personal character, and they can even be useful in reducing the level of violence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1253.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93307086614 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79209367529 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602362204724 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 386.1 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3693993302 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.416666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0833333333 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207294388679 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750675610711 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515036927711 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103811874733 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522889201481 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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