The widespread use of the Internet gives people more freedom at home instead of going to work or college. Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
It is true that the Internet advances changes the human life in some easier ways including working from home and online study approach. While there are both benefits and drawbacks of this approach, I would argue that using the Internet is the better way for many individuals.
On the one hand, the overdosed use of the Internet is the main reason leading to health problems in today modern world. First, the prolonged exposure to screen everyday has detrimental effects on some parts of your body. Take my younger bother as an example, last year he applied for an online Korean language course over a period of 12 months that each lesson lasted for 3 hours per day and it required him to glue his eyes on laptop screen consecutively in order to read each Korean word correctly. This is why he became seriously myopic. Furthermore, working from home causes employees disturbed by other works. If a female employee is allocated to work at her home, it will be easy that she priotirizes the household chores instead of paying attention to her work that leads to reduce work performance in the long run.
On the other hand, the Internet does wonders for society in some ways. First, without being outside, people can save substantial amount of money. If employees work from home and students don’t have to go to school, not only the commuting cost but also the renting fees for office will be reduced significantly. For instance, art freelancer who works from home can produce much creative masterpiece and cuts backs cost for transportation every day. Moreover, using the Internet exerts good effects on education. It allows students to study in their own pace instead of being under peer pressure in offline class.
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against the widespread use of the Internet nowadays, I believe that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...First, the prolonged exposure to screen everyday has detrimental effects on some parts o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92767295597 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59776027589 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.632075471698 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5264313246 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.466666667 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186512601106 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608565708698 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0430560468254 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117810044525 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133204350749 0.056905535591 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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