The widespread use of the Internet gives people more freedom at home instead of going to work or college. Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that the dramatic increase in the usage of the Internet allows people to work or even study at home more easily. While this may bring about some benefits, I would argue that the potential problems are greater.
On the one hand, there are a number of good impacts when people stay at home and work or learn through the internet. The first advantage is that their time tables are more flexible. They can arrange time to fit their personal schedules and take the advantage of waiting interval to do house work which is impossible if they are at office or university. Furthermore, they do not have to drive to workplace or college. As a result, they do not need to take a long, exhausted time on a busy, noisy road, and of course, can save a lot of money from car parking fee, fuel expense…
On the other hand, it seems to me that the drawbacks can prevail over the merits. A home worker will miss the chance to work with lots of colleagues from different backgrounds, which enables them to gain many valuable experience. If they only stay at home, they will not know how to build up a strong relationship with other workers and how to manage conflicts. Secondly, the effect of studying online can be harmed by the explosion of social networks and other entertainment services. In fact, without any controlling and forcing from teachers, students would spend many hours a day on playing games, chatting with friends on Facebook, watching film on Youtube and not much on reading academic documents.
In conclusion, although the widespread use of the internet brings about both positive and negative effect in occupation and education at home, I believe that the disadvantages exceed the advantages.
Comments
a good writing. Are u Ngoc
a good writing. Are u Ngoc Bach 's student? :)
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun experience seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much valuable experience', 'a good deal of valuable experience'.
Suggestion: much valuable experience; a good deal of valuable experience
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, of course, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1415.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76430976431 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63076537078 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59595959596 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.946691337 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.916666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.25 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22678718969 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834173387102 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739501185238 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141727623307 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574713530554 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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