Write about the following topic.
It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
It is observed that those who exerted a great influence on the world dedicated themselves entirely to their professional life and ignore the concept of "work-life balance". Personally, unlike the message these people conveyed, I believe that addressing a balance between work and social life is of paramount importance.
Forefront among the reasons to support my view is the fact that working without a break often leads to long-term physical and mental health problems. For instance, office staff who regularly work unsocial hours to meet deadlines have been reported to suffer from deteriorated eyesight and alerting levels of stress. In Japan, stress from working has also been cited as the reason a considerable proportion of young people suffer from depression and in some cases, committed suicide. These problems can potentially undermine not only productivity at work, in particular but also the entire workforce, in general.
In addition, it is worth noting that there is more to life than just working. One of the fundamental reasons why people constantly push themselves to the limits at work is so that they could make a better life for themselves and their family. While having a high degree of commitment to one's career might give them more chances for accumulating wealth, it often comes at the price of quality time with friends and family. This could lead to feelings of isolation and regret later in life. An example to illustrate this point is Steve Jobs, who prior to his passing expressed his tremendous regret at having allocated his hours to only his work instead of allowing more time for his daughter.
In conclusion, I am convinced that work-life balance is an essential part of society as the lack of it could damage not only people's mental and physical health but also their social bonds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 288, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e having a high degree of commitment to ones career might give them more chances for...
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Line 5, column 541, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a prior'.
Suggestion: who is a prior
...to illustrate this point is Steve Jobs, who prior to his passing expressed his tremendous...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in particular, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13666666667 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77202493175 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596666666667 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.320504158 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.416666667 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29366203379 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106021030328 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711421068588 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187366121012 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706619972945 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.