It has been noted that many people who had a big impact on the world gave themselves completely to their work and did not bother with the idea of “work-life balance”. To what extent should people try to have a good work-life balance?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many worldwide influencers as well as well-known celebrities have been building a role model of modern people who have completely sacrificed
for their career and never been disturbed by the term of "work-life balance". However, from my perspective, people should not totally be moulded by this idea for some reasons detailed below.
First of all, there is a myth that totally focusing on careers would provide material stability, but besides careers and jobs, social relationships and self-connection are worth investing in. Obviously, properties build a good foundation for a stable life, but people will lose their meaning in life without a true connection with others or themselves. Yet it does not mean social life is a top priority over work, since over-orientating to one extreme only leads to a massive lack of the other. Relationships with family members, friends, or neighbors will be unable to sustain themselves with the absence of financial stability, just as career paths will be unable to expand and develop if there were no goals to strive for.
Hence, establishing specific plans and targets is a way of balancing people's lives. First, depending on each individual's needs, time and efforts can be shared properly. Being surrounded by a happy family is the most important goal to some people, so they prefer to devote more time and effort to it. And vice versa. Furthermore, optimizing effectiveness in career development as well as personal care is more crucial than the proportions of time and effort spent on them. Although budgets could be limited, the more devoted people are, the brighter the result will be.
In conclusion, people should not be ridiculously overwhelmed by the concept of "work-life balance" since it totally depends on personal ways of defining it. No matter what is a priority in one's life, working it to the fullest is the bottom line.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17532467532 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04678341677 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62987012987 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3030436423 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.857142857 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283713308049 0.244688304435 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884899469271 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088534006171 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171595623754 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813128179092 0.056905535591 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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