Some educationalists say that every child should be taught how to play a musical instrument. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many parents have their kids registered in musical instrument classes in the belief that this will give them a brilliant chance of self-development. I do not deny all of the possible advantages of learning to play a musical instrument at a child, but it should not be obligatory either, for some reasons detailed below.
Obviously, it is scientifically proven that children can benefit from learning a musical instrument at a young age. One of its greatest advantages is that music helps children stimulate their senses, creativity, and self-expression. According to scientist James Hudziak, children who had undergone musical training were found to have an increase in cortical thickness in the areas of the brain that dictate functions such as memory, organisation skills, and attention span. It brings another reasonable benefit: that children become patient during the learning process. With a specific target like musical instruments, children are able to stay focused on training themselves better than others do not.
However, despite the great benefits of learning to play an instrument at a young age, it should not be mandatory for every child. In fact, based on science-proven research of nine different types of intelligence, some children who are not born talented at sensing music could find it a burden. For example, a kid who is strongly interested in maths may not perform so well at playing a musical instrument, and vice versa. Hence, because of different talents, children can develop themselves in other areas, not just in playing musical instruments. They can develop themselves in other beneficial areas such as fine arts, plants, or languages, too.
In summary, I believe that encouraging children to learn to play a musical instrument is a good thing, but it should not be a must. Parents should spend time helping their kids discover their talents and strong points in order to find the best path of self-development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, so, well, for example, in fact, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2268370607 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0293133844 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578274760383 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.9506941334 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.857142857 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3571428571 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 7.06120827912 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217457841646 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837626655745 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797236415079 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152577928043 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566866759403 0.056905535591 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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