You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money Do you agree or disagree Which other types of job should be highly paid Give reasons for your answer

Essay topics:

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money.

Do you agree or disagree?

Which other types of job should be highly paid?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 254 words.

In the contemporary world entertainment sector has a vital position in the life for society.Movies,sings or even sports doing for amuse to people much more.Arranging to music competitions, sport event or movies night just for happines for a while.Just a amount of bit part for the art or society.And the end of the this amusing stars who has playing this movies,sports or musicians gain too much moneys.

Initially,doing some thing as a successful is realy diffucult and vital.Sing a song very beatiful or running for a maraton it's not a piece of cake for everyone.For example, just image running the maraton for 100 mt in the international competition ,sport start has feeling a lot of pressure,nervous during match.Even before they have to spent a lot of time for the be winner.Regular exercise,eating carefully and a lot of hard things.Like a sports men and women,singers,film starts or any kind of artists have a nearly same situtations.Thus,end of the entertainment they get high money.

And the other hands,this type of people could be work plenty of their time.However,eventually in community everyone have to be work for doing their best in their occupation.Why they should earn money more than a doctor or an engineer? Are this people have a less stress rather than movie starts?Or their work hours more balance than the musicians.This kind of people should be deserve more than artists or sports starts.

Eventually,according to me i believe a amusing sector is not a vital.They could be assit the community for be more happy and gain less stressful life.However,they are not saving life or construct something for the individuals.Doctors,nurses,egineer or police officers should gain more money rather than starts.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Movies
... vital position in the life for society.Movies,sings or even sports doing for amuse to...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , sings
... position in the life for society.Movies,sings or even sports doing for amuse to peopl...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Arranging
...rts doing for amuse to people much more.Arranging to music competitions, sport event or m...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Just
...ies night just for happines for a while.Just a amount of bit part for the art or soc...
^^^^
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ight just for happines for a while.Just a amount of bit part for the art or socie...
^
Line 1, column 297, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...ount of bit part for the art or society.And the end of the this amusing stars who h...
^^^
Line 1, column 312, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...t for the art or society.And the end of the this amusing stars who has playing this movi...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 351, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... the this amusing stars who has playing this movies,sports or musicians gain too muc...
^^^^
Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , sports
...musing stars who has playing this movies,sports or musicians gain too much moneys. I...
^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...his movies,sports or musicians gain too much moneys. Initially,doing some thing a...
^^^^
Line 3, column 10, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , doing
...cians gain too much moneys. Initially,doing some thing as a successful is realy dif...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 17, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'something'?
Suggestion: something
...ain too much moneys. Initially,doing some thing as a successful is realy diffucult and ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 31, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[2]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...oneys. Initially,doing some thing as a successful is realy diffucult and vital.Sing a son...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Sing
...successful is realy diffucult and vital.Sing a song very beatiful or running for a m...
^^^^
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... very beatiful or running for a maraton its not a piece of cake for everyone.For ex...
^^^
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...on its not a piece of cake for everyone.For example, just image running the maraton...
^^^
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... 100 mt in the international competition ,sport start has feeling a lot of pressur...
^^
Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , nervous
...port start has feeling a lot of pressure,nervous during match.Even before they have to s...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
... a lot of pressure,nervous during match.Even before they have to spent a lot of time...
^^^^
Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...re they have to spent a lot of time for the be winner.Regular exercise,eating carefull...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Regular
...o spent a lot of time for the be winner.Regular exercise,eating carefully and a lot of ...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , eating
... time for the be winner.Regular exercise,eating carefully and a lot of hard things.Like...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Like
...ting carefully and a lot of hard things.Like a sports men and women,singers,film sta...
^^^^
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , singers
... hard things.Like a sports men and women,singers,film starts or any kind of artists have...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 537, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
... artists have a nearly same situtations.Thus,end of the entertainment they get high ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , end
...ists have a nearly same situtations.Thus,end of the entertainment they get high mone...
^^^^
Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , this
...y get high money. And the other hands,this type of people could be work plenty of ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 76, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ople could be work plenty of their time.However,eventually in community everyone have t...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , eventually
...uld be work plenty of their time.However,eventually in community everyone have to be work f...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Why
...or doing their best in their occupation.Why they should earn money more than a doct...
^^^
Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... more than a doctor or an engineer? Are this people have a less stress rather than m...
^^^^
Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Or
... a less stress rather than movie starts?Or their work hours more balance than the ...
^^
Line 5, column 348, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
...k hours more balance than the musicians.This kind of people should be deserve more t...
^^^^
Line 5, column 378, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'deserved'?
Suggestion: deserved
...musicians.This kind of people should be deserve more than artists or sports starts. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , according
... artists or sports starts. Eventually,according to me i believe a amusing sector is not...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 28, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...s starts. Eventually,according to me i believe a amusing sector is not a vital...
^
Line 7, column 38, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... Eventually,according to me i believe a amusing sector is not a vital.They coul...
^
Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...believe a amusing sector is not a vital.They could be assit the community for be mor...
^^^^
Line 7, column 151, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...more happy and gain less stressful life.However,they are not saving life or construct s...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 158, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...ppy and gain less stressful life.However,they are not saving life or construct someth...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Doctors
...construct something for the individuals.Doctors,nurses,egineer or police officers shoul...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 234, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , nurses
...ct something for the individuals.Doctors,nurses,egineer or police officers should gain ...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, while, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1457.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24100719424 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.10304269666 2.80592935109 146% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539568345324 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 55.0 20.2975951904 271% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 141.831731287 49.4020404114 287% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 291.4 106.682146367 273% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 55.6 20.7667163134 268% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 5.01903807615 837% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217539360247 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119459523295 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0362443189756 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128123571745 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377983975175 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.1 13.0946893788 238% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.65 50.2224549098 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.7 11.3001002004 219% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.0 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 9.78957915832 296% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.0 10.1190380762 237% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 10.7795591182 269% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.