You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia Write a report for a university teacher describing the information show

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

Write a report for a university teacher describing the information shown.

You should write at least 150 words.

The illustrated show to amount of the gender in different occupations between 1975 and 1995.According to graphs there is 6 different sector both male and female workers.And relevant to sex sectors are changing.

Initially,manufacturing,wholesale and retail trade,publich sector(non-defence) have amount of high employees.Apart from public sector(non-defence) the other 2 sectors approximately working number of same people.Nearly 650 person are doing this jobs.In public sector more than 800 person working.Rage between male and female number are almost 150 in wholesale and public sector(non-defence).And worker of men is more than women.And also in manufacturing sector gap is more bigger than the others sectors.Number of female workes is nearly 300 and male is almost 700.

On the other hand,in public defence sector has lowest amount of female workers and only more 200 male employee.Finance sector is following the defence public sector for low amount of female workers.And range between female and male almsot 300 person in this circumstance.Finaly in communications sector both gender is almost same number of workers.Female and male are almost same in this occupation branch.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...erent occupations between 1975 and 1995.According to graphs there is 6 different sector b...
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...oximately working number of same people.Nearly 650 person are doing this jobs.In publi...
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...gender is almost same number of workers.Female and male are almost same in this occupa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, apart from, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 6.8 191% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1010.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77142857143 4.92477711251 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.17942872768 2.65546596893 157% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508571428571 0.547539520022 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 313.2 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 3.0 8.94146341463 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 22.4926829268 258% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 142.448431215 43.030603864 331% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 336.666666667 112.824112599 298% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.3333333333 22.9334400587 254% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.3333333333 5.23603664747 274% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 1.69756097561 1355% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194573381954 0.215688989381 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155359805945 0.103423049105 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416252110741 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155359805945 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416252110741 0.0819641961636 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.9 13.2329268293 264% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -4.31 61.2550243902 -7% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 6.51609756098 262% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 10.3012195122 275% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.07 11.4140731707 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.0 11.4329268293 280% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 25.2 10.9970731707 229% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.