More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experi

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.

Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, an increasing concern for many people around the world is health issues. Especially the children effects from this problem. In this problem mostly seems in rich and develop countries. In this essay I will examine the effects of diet on people and provide my overall opinion.

In the modern time fast food is strongly becoming usual diet for most of people in a day.Obviously, there is a some reasons for why the fast food preferring mostly. First of all, most of people such as a students, business man and woman or even mothers don’t want to spend a lot of time for eating some things.Because of this kind of food is easy and effortless.Despite of the poor countries, the wealthy countries has a big problem with this food habits.Because, this kids who live in the developed countries can be able to reach easily to this foods.Therefore, the number of obesity is increasing in this countries.According to the research, this food contain a lot of a high sugar and a saturated fats. For examples, the USA has an increasing number of this issues.And also, this food caused the blood sugar and heart diseases.And the earliest ages is too dangerous for this diseases.

On the other hands, prevent to this problem is not impossible. The solution is encourage the children for eating home food. Actually, there is a new trend for supporting this idea.The slow food, this trend born in Europe for solution this problem. Because, like a USA the Europe also in same situation.Therefore, nowadays the volunteers visiting the school for telling the children how this diseases could be deadly and why is vital sustain eating home food.

In conclusion, in view of opinion the government should be support the this new idea for healthy generation. Moreover, these sort of food be able to restriction for some ages.And this way could be assist the prevent wrong diets

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, so, therefore, for example, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1379.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.925 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05273380324 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 135.824327474 49.4020404114 275% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 125.363636364 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4545454545 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 7.06120827912 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341563962221 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159398292177 0.084324248473 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792830057471 0.0667982634062 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.253067850236 0.151304729494 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189019447878 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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