More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experi

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More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries.

Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Overweight is the one of the main problem these children are facing. This is very serious problem for all wealthy countries and their are certain things responsible for this. First of all i would like to mention the basic reason for getting overweight is that children are taking sweeten drinks more than water. These drinks are available at every country and almost 80% of the children are in addiction of these drinks. the drinks are available in various tastes and even these days juices are also available in tetra packs. Children consuming more colorize than they required.

Secondly most of the people from develop countries are busy with their jobs day by day and they don't have enough time to give fresh food to their children. Children relay on frozen and fast food most of the time. Parents want to give them proper cooked food but they have short time, in modern era parents also consume fast food which is fetching them into decreases. Recently a survey show they also do not do any exercise in there free time, most of the children spent time on TVs, Mobiles and computers. Governments conducting programs for parents hoe to feed their children and recently United States of America Government have taken initiated to banned fried and cold drinks for children less 12 years. The results are very good in just 18 months, lot's of children lost their excessive weight.

Finally this is our call which foods is more nutritious for our upcoming generations. These kind of foods and activities make them lazy and stubborn. I would suggest to parents cook fresh meal at home once a day at least. It will make a huge difference in out children health also we need to encourage them into sports where they can play as well as it will helpful to burn extra fat.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, at least, kind of, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73139158576 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27566317177 2.80592935109 81% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569579288026 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6310021434 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.375 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20262020808 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711009940134 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817517039194 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135071054277 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792261967028 0.056905535591 139% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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