Young people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by other of the same age. This is called “peer pressure”. Do the disadvantages of peer pressure outweigh the disadvantages?
It is true that peer pressure is an important phenomenon in the development of young people. While I understand that it may induce some adverse impact on adolescents, I believe that the benefits do outweigh the drawbacks.
On one hand, young people may pursuit materialistic goals when comparing with others, thus putting financial pressure on their families. People in a young age are likely to become self- abased when their friends show off the high-priced and newest belongings which they do not possess, so they may generate irrational purchasing desire. For example, children want to have the designer clothes and top-end cellphones bought by their parents if the people around them own such things. Therefore, families of these children may suffer from economic hardship and even have conflicts between family numbers.
In spite the drawbacks mentioned above, I believe that peer pressure can simulate young people’s motivation to study hard, which could help them achieve their potential and make their way in life. Young people have their self-esteem, and do not want to be seen as intellectually inferior to others. Seeing their classmates have the ability to do something, such as solving a challenging mathematic problem, they tend to dedicate themselves to learning knowledge in order to improve their academic performance, which can help them achieve success eventually. If they are detached from their peer group, young people only know their own condition, and it is hard to inspire the potential and develop the capacity of them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 444, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...d cellphones bought by their parents if the people around them own such things. Therefore, families of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 247.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31578947368 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78463057117 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0489551367 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.3 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23985626338 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986211541865 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565648311153 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159601784959 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0329200394349 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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