Zoos are inhumane and should be abolished To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

It is often considered that every living specie on the planet is free to life, and should not be controlled by anyone. The accurate example is Zoo, a place where animals are kept for watching. However, some suggest to eradicate the zoo system. I completely agree with this.
On one hand, animals evolve according to the environment, by facing challenges from predators and unsuitable climates. Whereas, in the zoo the animals are kept in a surrounded place thus making there life easy with this the evolution process of animals stops. For instance, some snakes developed a mechanism of shooting venom while approaching others to safeguard them. Since being in harsh places they have developed unimaginable tactics and as humans we are studying those for making our life easy. If the reptile is cozy place and no other threats we will not able to see this god like mechanism.
Secondly, even other living organisms have relationships like humans. With placing them in a human watchable place, these are separated from there loved ones. I would like to give example from a video I watched online. In that a elephant is being separated from her mother to keep in wildlife park, at that movement the child is shedding tears as it is being taken away. Thus made me very sad. Therefore, it even destroys there life.
To summarize, the animal parks looks inhuman as they try to rip relationship and stop there evolution. Therefore, I stand with banning those kind of places and be a human.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest eradicating'.
Suggestion: suggest eradicating
...ls are kept for watching. However, some suggest to eradicate the zoo system. I completely agree with...
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Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...from predators and unsuitable climates. Whereas, in the zoo the animals are kept in a s...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... from a video I watched online. In that a elephant is being separated from her mo...
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Line 4, column 135, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'those kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; those kinds
...lution. Therefore, I stand with banning those kind of places and be a human.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, while, for instance, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1232.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85039370079 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58583204657 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622047244094 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8999776319 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4705882353 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9411764706 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58823529412 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153236595182 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520219100245 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647307731421 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106315392222 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565272618927 0.056905535591 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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