Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us want to be and to look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
it is sometimes argued that the ultimate aim of advertising is to subtly persuade people to want or buy things which they do not really need, thus losing their self-esteem. personally, I share the same view with this argument. this essay will discuss this argument in the forthcoming paragraph, followed by the reasoned conclusion.
To begin with, there are several rationales to justify that advertisement discourages people by misleading them. On the first hand, advertisers use many underhand techniques, Viz. provocative pictures, and attention-grabbing words written on big posters to attract people to purchase the product or service, hence, this make people feel inferior of who they are and they start dreaming respected product. For instance, youngsters have started living an unhealthy lifestyle, just of the fact, that they want to be thinner or look like, so-called zero size celebrities, whom they saw in advertisements. Secondly, the image of glamour, power, and success associated with the product, creates an illusion in the mind of people, consequently, they take it a must-have product. Recently, a survey conducted by Oxford universitys' management department concluded that people are now less happy than they were 30 years back, despite being better off and having more money to spend on things.
however, on the contrary, those who oppose this state that, advertisement allows a person to differentiate between competing products and to remain up to date. For example, anyone, at leisure, by going through brochures and catalogues can come to a guided decision. however, I would say that the advertisement should not be such that it creates artificial wants among people. Rather than consumerism, companies should focus on social messages such as road safety, and hygiene.
To sum up, I will restate that advertisements distort people in many ways, by showing or giving false perceptions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, for instance, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1625.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 300.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41666666667 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03690449124 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683333333333 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0828159133 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.071428571 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4285714286 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.4285714286 7.06120827912 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176217913142 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551510560182 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0463331494117 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912763445134 0.151304729494 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026375413901 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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