Art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of society. Do you think art and music still have a place in today’s modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?
- Write at least 250 words.
- You should spend around 40 minutes on this task.
We all live in a community and we survive mostly by following norms and rules of it, moreover, there are lot of basic cultural habits and things which keeps us united and in sync with each other. Out of these, music and arts are some of the basic elements of our society, which plays very crucial and important part in growth of kids.
We consider them as fundamental elements, not only because listening to music bring joy to our lives, but learning and practicing it makes us disciplined, dedicated, regular and hard working. Being an artist makes you more focused and down to earth.
Nowadays, as we are drawn towards western culture, interest in our own values and cultural heritage is keep on decreasing. We have numerous artists in our history, which includes writes, musicians, painters and many more and these are classified on era of the various historians. In my opinion, majorly, art and music is replaced by technology, for instance, mostly everyone is so busy, no one can spare time to learn some instrument or to draw or to write. Either people who are pursuing these elements professionally or as a hobby, whereas it cannot be part of our routine. Mobile phones have taken over on books, colors , musical instruments and the list goes on, everything is easily available on internet.
I strongly believe children should be involved in more activities which includes learning various forms of arts and music. This not only will be beneficial for children's growth and development, as well, it will help to restore our lost heritage. Although, we know kids are occupied with studies and sports activities,but we need to support our them for music as it is really important for one's brain development. I have a really good example, Bengali people gives there kids a choice in the initial stage of their childhood to choose among arts, music, writing,dancing and they have to pursue it their whole life. I feel that's is a major reason, we have so many artist and musicians from Bengal.
To summarize, kids, along with there regular curriculum, should spend more time learning art and music at school, so that they can learn rhythm, discipline in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, really, so, well, whereas, for instance, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 10.4138276553 240% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88075880759 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66116869925 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593495934959 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.009776583 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.066666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265265294326 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874621238069 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850210782112 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158863752723 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678098271647 0.056905535591 119% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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