Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?
A big section of the society believes that promoting arts, helps in the preservation of the local culture in many parts of the world. In comparison, an even larger part of the society agrees that the benefits of science, technology and business far outweigh those of the arts. A cogent reason for this is the monetary aspects linked to these fields. Alternatively, if conscious measures are taken to preserve the cultural heritage, it is possible to persuade people to follow arts.
On the one hand, the key determinant why people prefer STEM and trade to the arts, is due to the job and career prospects these streams bring along. In addition, a graduate trained in STEM or one setting up a business is considered to be more practical and settled, unlike an arts graduate who really has to struggle hard to find a feasible job. Moreover, a country needs advancements in science and technology streams as these contribute to the overall growth of an economy. For instance, a recent study by Gartner showcased that only 5% of arts graduate were able to find a suitable job post their studies, unlike 85% of successful students graduated from other streams.
On the other hand, it is the responsibility of the government to take certain steps to promote local arts and culture forms. Firstly, providing the citizens with free or subsidised access to art galleries, museums or theatres, might make them visit these places quite often. Secondly, organising cultural shows portraying local history through dance, stories and folklore will additionally entice people to know more about their historical past. Furthermore, such activities could also lead to the promotion of such places as a hot tourist attraction. For example, the footfall at The Esplanades in Singapore is almost double on the weekends as the theatres organise many free musical and theatrical performances for the audience.
In conclusion, it can be stated that careers in science, technology and business will always be preferred due to the monetary elements involved. At the same time, if the government takes certain focussed decisions, steps can be taken to revive the local arts heritage as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 255, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arts'' or 'art's'?
Suggestion: arts'; art's
... steps can be taken to revive the local arts heritage as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09243697479 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79744015933 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579831932773 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6905874564 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.2 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2666666667 7.06120827912 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230391008395 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067714856074 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314371174517 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123574001393 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234864512401 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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