Art is considered as essential part of human cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and their focus to science, technology and business. Why do you think that is?
What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?
From the ancient age, art has been an integral part in human cultural development. With the globalization and technology development human interest on art activities has been declined due to impact of science, technology and commercialized nature of the society. Below essay illustrates reasons and consequences of this decline and what measures can be taken to advance interest in the art activities.
In today’s society people are heavily dependent on the science and technology since it enhances life style and provides comfort to a person’s life. For example, computer technology eases the workload of the person and development of medical science improves human longivity. Due to above reasons, many employment opportunities were created in the above sectors, thus people’s focus in art and entertainment activities has gradually declined. This diminishing effect might have a negative impact on social and behavioral development of the society therefore, precautionary measures must be taken by all concerns and authorities to overcome this effect.
In order to encourage people’s interest in the art activities, authorities can organize regular events facilitating art and cultural activities with public awareness programmes to teach the importance of the art activities for the society. Further, it can be promoted by implementing art subjects to the school curriculum at very young age. In addition to that, authorities must take necessary steps to assure that sufficient opportunities were created in the field of art for individuals studying or specializing in art.
In conclusion, it is obvious that interest in art activities has declined due to various technical and commercial demand in the society. However, influence of art for human development cannot be ignored thus authorities must take appropriate measures to improve people’s interest in the art subjects and activities.
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Avoid repetitions, like human development had “development” used more than once, try synonyms.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1951.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78931750742 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.43898095408 2.80592935109 123% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545994065282 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8098266269 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.764705882 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 7.06120827912 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232634465908 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740125850553 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0528726834775 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119955126756 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0591853688642 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.3 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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