Being a celebrity- such as a famous film star or sports personality- brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?
A famous person always has to face problems and benefits as well. Although being a celebrity means extremely wealthy, this essay totally agrees that they have more problems than advantages because they do not have their private life and they are always so stressful.
The primary drawback of being a famous person is that there is no private life. That is because their daily activities and pictures are purchased with a very high price by famous newspapers. Photographers and reporters follow them 24 hours per day to catch up any of their movement. For example, David Beckham talked in a show that his family have not have their own lives because photographers have always been ready outside of their house in order to take their pictures and sell them.
Another reason is that celebrities always get stress and they have to see their doctor or use medicines to release stress. That is to say that their job requires them to act every time when they appear in public; therefore, they cannot be who they are. This leads to a brain’s exhaustion. If they did not see their doctor, they would have some mental problems. For instance, a Korean singer, who chose to suicide last year at age 28, wrote a letter that he wanted to say sorry to his family because he terminated his life but he had no choice. He was so stressful because of his celebrity’s life.
In conclusion, even though celebrities earn more money than others, being a famous film or sports star brings more problems than benefits because of non-private and stressful life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 352, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1284.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80898876404 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56011070894 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.580524344569 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0054327602 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7692307692 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218623046015 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901249459463 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123560953064 0.0667982634062 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192263502134 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.156218472663 0.056905535591 275% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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