Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
While some would argue that young people should be taught to compete, others say that they will grow up to be a better person when they are encouraged to learn to co-operate. Although working in a team is better for their future career, I believe that they should always be ready to compete to be the winner.
On one hand, co-operation is the most important skill that is required by any company at any position. This means being able to work together with the others but the unique character of each person still need to be kept. Therefore, teaching children how to work in a team with other people effectively is preparing them a key to success in their future. For example, the invention of Iphone is contributed not only by Steve Jobs but also by his brilliant team. Steve Jobs himself could not be able to be realistic his idea of a smart phone. However, I believe that this skill can be trained at any time and children do not need to be taught to work with the others effectively.
On the other hand, children who are encouraged to fight to be a winner always try their best to improve themselves in order to win any competition. It is shown that a person who is finding the way to be a better version of himself or herself becomes more successful than a person who accepts his or her ability. For instance, Nike and Adidas always compete to gain their customers; hence, their products have been improving year by year. Without one of them, sneakers will never reach to today’s level of designs and qualities. Therefore, I believe that this skill is the most important one that children need to learn.
In conclusion, while co-operation is a key skill to success in children’s future career, I believe that competition is needed because it teaches kids to always do their best and pushes youngsters to reach out their next level.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 329.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62917933131 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6061840292 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498480243161 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 470.7 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2929097716 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.785714286 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.21428571429 7.06120827912 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239064624217 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0834035503317 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511724225103 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148183632224 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242797089679 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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