Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits.Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Essay topics:

Being a celebrity such as a famous film star or sports personality brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

Being rich and famous is a dream millions have, as they want to live the lavish life and enjoy the stardom. But with the fame, there are also some problems associated. However, I am among the millions who feel that the benefits of being a celebrity far outweigh its drawbacks.

The first benefit is the lifestyle they live. It is well documented that the people who are rich live an extravagant life. To illustrate, M.S. Dhoni is fond of bike and he owns some of the most exotic bikes of the world. Moreover, the fame that follows cannot be neglected. Wherever they go, they feel loved and respected which is definitely a boon to them.

Once the person becomes famous, they take part in charity work; whether it be due to peer pressure or due to awareness of the society. One of the best example of such a person is Salman Khan, as he donates a major proportion of his income to orphanage. In addition, they also act as a source or light for the next generation as a lot of teenagers consider them to be role models and most of the superstars rightly oblige to it.

However, these people have to sacrifice their personal space as the paparazzi are constantly after them. Even their career are mostly short and it might then become very difficult for them to get back to their normal life.

To recapitulate, there might be a few problems associated with being popular. I however feel that the life they live is all worth it as they get to live in luxurious houses and travel the world.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, then, well, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1226.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52398523985 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43242015313 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568265682657 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5892961296 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7333333333 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0666666667 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 7.06120827912 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161065021087 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571693255166 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543771248852 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0919662591637 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555636700337 0.056905535591 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.0946893788 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.

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