Being a celebrity – such as a famous film star or a sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits.
Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or problems?
In this modern era, everyone wants to become a celebrity. I agree that to being a film star or sport personality there may be some difficulties and some profits.in the following paragraph I shall put my argument to support my opinion, also discuss on the profit and difficulties faced by the celebrity.
my first argument in favour of to become a film star and sport personality is give lots of profit to them. The celebrity have a major contribution in the lives of people. they provide entertainment and inspiration. they deserve high salary ,they all have telephone figure salary. All celebrities are rich, they enjoy luxurious life. some cricketers are the role modal of the people. they are also brand ambassador of some company. they can work in national level or international level. they would be famous always. they also bring name and fame of the country. they are role model of society and people follow them and listen to them.
my second argument is that, they also have some difficulties in their life.they could not enjoy their personal life as normal folk do. they always need security. they could not able to go anywhere without any security. most of the people in the spots and entertainment field they start their career at the age of 20-21 and retire by 35-36years.these celebs sacrifice their personal life completely. The film star and sports person have very small career span. most of their fans always follow them, that is why their children also needs to security.
To sum up, people in this field of sports and entertainment they always have more benefits, however there are many other problems before this celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1377.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93548387097 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68993490584 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537634408602 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 5.43587174349 331% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.5844300144 49.4020404114 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 68.85 106.682146367 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.95 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 5.01903807615 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160531903725 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484495184876 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570670804002 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102332892547 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273317311227 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.0946893788 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.78 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 78.4519038076 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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