Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often said that both the upper class and the less privileged people have to face challenges to get admission in a university but i completely disagree with this view. I believe that families with strong financial backgrounds easily get admission , conversely the weaker section of our society, who always have to struggle for the same.

First and foremost, most of the universities reserve seats, specially for the children of affluent families so that they can get a good sum of money from them in the form of fees and donations, which help them to increase there earning.It is also an acceptable fact that rich people possess influential contacts and by using them they easily get recommendations for admission. For example, a recent data collected from the top universities have revealed that more than 70 percent students got admission in highly reputed colleges with the help of donations and which is almost impossible for the weaker section of our society.

On the other hand, people from economically deprived section have to take help from various sources so that they can afford the heavy fees and charges and this is also on of the reason which makes this process complicated for them. They have to strive hard to get scholarship to continue their studies. If they fail to win a scholarship their dream of pursuing higher education is shattered. Statistics reveal that poor students are more likely to drop out of college than rich students because of their inability to pay the tuition fees. Furthermore, the never get any recommendations as they can not afford the requested donation amounts.

In conclusion, It is quiet clear from the above points that upper class people easily get admission in the desired college, while the impoverished people have to struggle a lot to get admission in a university.

Votes
Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'getting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: getting
...ivileged people have to face challenges to get admission in a university but i complet...
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Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nancial backgrounds easily get admission , conversely the weaker section of our so...
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Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...ich help them to increase there earning.It is also an acceptable fact that rich pe...
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Line 9, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... scholarship to continue their studies. If they fail to win a scholarship their dr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1533.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0262295082 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77963221452 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540983606557 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.5071673331 49.4020404114 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.3 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.5 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0572472510861 0.244688304435 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0248435318874 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036822546339 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0357818225785 0.151304729494 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251904182355 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 50.2224549098 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.49 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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