In countries where unemployment is high education should only be obligatory upto primary school and not secondary. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Throughout the human history education is considered as key component to mitigate economic issues such as unemployment. In my opinion, restricting education at primary level will further devastate the economy specifically unemployment will rise. This essay will demonstrate the effects of mandatory primary or secondary level education on countries already struggling with increasing unemployment ratios.
To begin with, education is a movement from darkness to light. Enforcement of primary education to eliminate unemployment will push back the economy and escalate other socio-economic issues like poverty, crime and illiteracy. Recent news broadcast on Geo News Pakistan has caught public attention where a young man attempted suicide, that is open fire in public due to the fact that despite of being educated upto primary level he was unemployed since 2 years and was unable to earn reasonable amount to suffice his family needs. Seen in this light, it is broadly accepted that such incidents are not odd in developing countries. Therefore, in order to survive in the economy at least secondary must be made compulsory so individuals can earn and deter away from destructive consequences.
Another insight that must not be neglected is that technology and modern advancement from last century has made the world a competitive domain. Employers are constantly searching for candidates with advanced education. Moreover, well educated person have less chances of getting unemployed than that of least educated person. Thus, individuals with higher education have more probability to regain employment than unemployed with lower education. History provides example that after global recession in 1980, Netherlands changed its education benchmark to secondary education and unemployment ratio decreases drastically. Consistent, with this line of thinking, it is observed that education is driving force to control unemployment.
To conclude, education is the most powerful tool to change the world. In view of above stated facts. I am inclined to believe that obligation of education till primary level will exaggerate unemployment as well as other socio-economic issues. Hence, providing avenues till secondary level is constructive approach that would help to control unemployment in the economy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, at least, such as, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 8.3376753507 324% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.74052478134 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06968150162 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603498542274 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0290428501 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.388888889 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0555555556 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38888888889 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.9879759519 301% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187016064612 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562918191128 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390311698663 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117851324774 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176827762425 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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