In countries where unemployment is high, education should only be obligatory up to primary school and not secondary school. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Lack of enough job creation is an impediment to the development of a country. Governments struck with such a problem, however, have been unable to deal with it effectively and many nations have been tempted to lower the bar for requirements of mandatory education to just basic schooling in order to encourage young people to enter the workforce. However, in my opinion this is a negative trend and public education to high school should be absolutely compulsory for individuals to become self-employed and career oriented.

Firstly, when schooling to secondary level is mandated, young people seek to become independent. It is not only the academic lessons they learn at school which make them confident but it's more about everyday life skills such as communication and team work they master in class environment which eventually make them self-reliant and accountable to their future. As a result, growing number of people have been found to run their own business, for example, by getting involved with a grocery shop or a mart from a very early age due to the exposure and motivation they get in the middle and high school for a better life.

Secondly, students who have completed their high school, tend to continue their learning to colleges and universities in hope of better long-term work opportunities. Since, extra-curricular activities and involvement in clubs can provide necessary skills that might be useful while looking for a part-time job at campus, young aspirants can pursue further studies with greater optimism and career goals. Even in developed world such as the United States, many wards from lesser well-to-do families carry on with their studies beyond high school with support from short-term stints at different facilities at the campus and university.

In summary, all countries irrespective of their employment rate should make it a legal requirement for young people to pass high school, which will bolster individuals with necessary skills and offer them opportunities for shouldering financial responsibilities and striving towards enhanced career pursuits.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in summary, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1777.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38484848485 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97718443851 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60303030303 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.7838581005 49.4020404114 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 177.7 106.682146367 167% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 20.7667163134 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 7.06120827912 191% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167489984195 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709878293429 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443970169827 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10524763008 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0146105234718 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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