Dangerous activities like extreme skiing bungee jumping etc and whether you support them or not

Essay topics:

Dangerous activities like extreme skiing, bungee jumping etc. and whether you support them or not.

It is irrefutable to say that, popularity of extreme sports has continued to grow over the last decade. People would like to do some dangerous sports like scuba diving, bungee jumping, bull fighting,etc in many countries. I am inclined to believe that these sports are in fact dangerous and they should not be promoted (my opinion in intro). This essay will discuss some advantages and disadvantages of adventure sports before giving appropriate conclusion.

On one hand, people who are in favor of adventurous sports claim, the risk-taking sports help in the development of self-confidence and independence of a person. For instance, by successfully facing up the challenges of adventurous sports like rock-climbing, young people overcome with their fears. Specifically, going through a dangerous experience gives them the courage to face the hurdles of their daily life (explaining example). Furthermore, there is a lot of fame and money involved in these sports. Performers get attention by doing stunts on motorcycles and jumping from tall buildings. In addition, playing such sports may considered as the symbol of manpower and something of gaining prestige in society.

On the other hand, opponents of extreme sports say that, being a extreme sportsmen is very risky and dangerous. If a rope breaks while bungee jumping, for example, a participant will be seriously injured or even die. Also, equipment needed for these sports are very expensive, many people cannot purchase them which eventually increases the chance of the tragedy. Above all, youngsters who gravitate towards these types of sports could not concentrate on their studies, due to which, they were not able to complete their studies and hence not able to get lucrative jobs.

To recapitulate, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that, we can say that adventure sports have many impressive benefits including problem-solving, self-confidence and teamwork. However, it is recommended that these sports should be tried under proper guidance and supervision. The government should provide adequate knowledge about these sports to athletes so that they can protect themselves from its dangers.

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Average: 8 (9 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47023809524 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03871816834 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616071428571 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3327566271 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.117647059 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.101305749368 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0346279207396 0.084324248473 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478596144981 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0644899588286 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047008163112 0.056905535591 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.