Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the government plays an important role in the development of the society and every government's decision is significant since the welfare is collected from the citizens. And whether to spend more money on art or on athletics has led to a heated discusison. Personalyy, I agree with the statement that more money is encouraged to spend by the government on arts than athletics for the following reasons.
Firstly, the funds on arts are mainly for the public, meaning that almost all individuals in the society have the opportunity to take part and benefit from it. This makes the funds much more meaningful to the society, narrowing the poverty gap within the nation. For example, the government of the city that I live in has spent a great deal of money on the art gallery, which is open to the public for free. I went to the art gallery once it has open, and to my suprise, a men with dirty who seemed to be the poor also went to enjoy the art work. This citizen in the society might not be wealthy and even it is hard for them to maintain their basic life. But thanks to the government, they have this precious chance to go to the gallery and enjoy this kind of social resource. Unlike funds for the Olympic teams that only a small group of people in the society can benit from it, citizens from children to the elderly are possible to get access to this gallery and enjoy the art atmosphere.
Admittedly, the state-sponsored Olympic team members worth the fund for the hardwork they have paid during training for the sake and honor of the country. Only a small group of people in the society can benif from this funding, which bring less positive social impacts them the arts funds. The national volleyball team who won the champion in Olympic Game from my country has got a great number of money for their hardwork. But in my opinion, the funds for atheletes are only for them but not the public, making this fund less efficient for the social development.
In summary, although the athletes should have been rewarded for their hardwork during training, it is more meaningful to spend the money on art for the government. Because art is for public and helps to strengthen the soft-core power of a nation and contributes more to the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, then, for example, in summary, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62935323383 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50696537159 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470149253731 0.561755894193 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.7570894914 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.3125 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157110506907 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692035208833 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812321963449 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129172096176 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0808985579662 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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