Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of small shops will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Local businesses make their surrounding communities vibrant. Every day thousands of small shops in neighborhoods go bankrupt and close their doors as a result of supermarkets siphoning all of the customers and profit. This is surely changing the culture of societies around the world. I completely agree with the idea that local communities become extinct as ‘mom and pop shops’ go out of business; these vendors are not only important to support economy but also to foster socialization.
Privately owned stores in the community are driving forces of the surrounding economy as they hire nearby residents and circulate local money. When residents in the neighborhood spend their money at their nearby stores, they are enabling the owners to hire people living in the area as cashiers, managers, cleaners and marketers. This in turn puts more money into the pocket of the people which they can then spend for more services and products in the area. For instance, when I buy groceries at Mr. Smith’s Corner store, he can continue to employ my cousin Jim who works there as a cashier. Since Jim is making money, he can afford to buy roses for his girlfriend and the next-door flower shop. This is one of two ways in which local shops sustain local communities.
Perhaps an even more important role of Mom and Pop Shops is providing opportunities for frequent interaction among the local residents. When people often meet with each other while buying food, getting hair cut or choosing tools at their grocer, barber and hardware store, they develop strong bonds. These close connections grow into friendships and a strong sense of community spirit. In the case of Jim, my cousin, he is not only employed my Mr. Smith, but considers him a friend of the family. Furthermore, he met his girlfriend working at Mr. Smith’s since she shops for milk there every morning and they have had many chances to interact.
In conclusion, local shops are the cornerstones of communities as not only places to empower economic growth but also to interpersonal development. Therefore, I strongly believe that with the death of these shops, as a result of corporate pressure, community spirit does suffer. It is the responsibility of people to determine what is most important when doing their shopping.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, so, then, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83990655693 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563157894737 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 5.43587174349 276% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.217310934 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11111111111 7.06120827912 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137075292993 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047343622927 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.045228819022 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0896450825629 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218228894697 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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