You live in a room in college which you share with another student.However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find itvery difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letterdescribe the situatio

Essay topics:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

describe the situation

explain your problems and why it is difficult to work

say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about the inconvenience faced by me at my accommodation, caused by my roommate.

Let me explain you the situation in detail. There is a lot of disturbing noise created and the odd hour room lighting is also adding to the inconvenience caused.

My roommate plays multiplayer games late at night and as a result of that, he is continuously chatting to his gaming friends. Additionally, he keeps the tube-light on for computer gaming almost till early morning. Not only this is disturbing my sleep pattern but also affecting my health, consequently, I am scoring low grades at college.

I would like to request you to either change my room and pair me with a like-minded person, or you can replace my roommate with someone more serious and considerate. I hope you can empathize with my situation.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours faithfully,

Abhishek Saxena

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...you can empathize with my situation. I look forward to hearing from you. Yo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, look, so, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 788.0 937.175257732 84% => OK
No of words: 159.0 206.0 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95597484277 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00449934871 2.54303337028 118% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 127.690721649 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.679245283019 0.622605031667 109% => OK
syllable_count: 238.5 290.88556701 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4548167578 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.8 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9 16.8248392259 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 4.34317383033 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215988155463 0.216113520407 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088046411128 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646644886329 0.0603063233224 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121362860738 0.12726935374 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585965051925 0.0580467560999 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 8.37731958763 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 8.71597938144 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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