During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one in his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman in your letter,R

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one in his restaurants.
Write a letter to this businessman in your letter,
Remind him when and where you met.
Tell him what kind of job you are interested in
Say why you think you would be suitable for the job.

Dear Sir,
Hope you find this letter in best of your health. I am Yasir Ali from Malaysia, we met at the airport lounge and shared the seats in the flight from Karachi to Kuala lampur last month. During our long conversation, you mentioned you are looking for a chef in one of your restaurant.
I am writing to this letter to tell you that I have recently left my job and looking for new opportunities. It reminded me of our talk that you need a chef in your restaurant and I am really interested in applying for that vacant cook position. I have 10 years of working experience in different 5 star restaurants as cook. I can cook any type of delicious cuisine and have done some certification related to western food. I am also good at managing people and willing to teach my skills that I have learned over the decade of experience to young ones in the food industry.
I will be waiting for your positive response.
Your sincerely
Yasir

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Dear Sir, Hope you find this letter in best of you...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... certification related to western food. I am also good at managing people and wil...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e to young ones in the food industry. I will be waiting for your positive respo...
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Line 5, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...your positive response. Your sincerely Yasir
^^^
Line 6, column 6, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...itive response. Your sincerely Yasir
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, really, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 773.0 1615.20841683 48% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 173.0 315.596192385 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.46820809249 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 4.20363070211 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63752354594 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 176.041082164 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630057803468 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 241.2 506.74238477 48% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5089863196 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186878387621 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783915450175 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828265557316 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11491740521 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706335941173 0.056905535591 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 50.2224549098 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 11.3001002004 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.35 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 78.4519038076 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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