Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat.
Discuss both and give your opinion.
Doctors everyday warn to people that the root of many diseases is from sweet things, such as sugar or chocolate, and they ask people to use less sugar in their diet. Some people believe that it is an administration role to reduce the use of sugar in people diet, while others think it is a personal duty and people should obey. This essay will shed some light on this argument from both sides and extend my partial support to the former view before arriving at conclusion.
Regime has a great power to unravel this issue, first of all government can put high tax and hard law on sugar import or sweet things that they are unhealthy for people. By this way, the buy power will be decreased and the range of consumers who eat sugar will be less. For instance, they can import or produce brown sugar of non-fat chocolate. It is obvious that eating sweet things such as chocolate or pure sugar cause a lot of diseases such as diabetes, blood pressure, heart diseases or any other problems for humans. Hence, government should find healthy sweet thing instead of sugar. More over the best way to teach people who do not have enough information of harmful sugar. Leaders can make advertisements or educational clips that show the negative points of using sugar in our routine diet, and encourage people to live their life healthier.
On the other hand, some persons believe that people should stop eating sugar. If people check up their body twice a year they can discover the problems on their body, after that they have to change their diet to get health. It depends on their determination and government cannot do anything on this subject. Some people knows that they have illness that are transferred by gene. All diseases which are related to sugar are genetic, thus they should care about their health and always keep their diet without harmful sugar. They do not drink beverage or eat chocolate or confection.
At the conclusion, in my opinion government plays a key role on people’s health. They should allocate a large amount budget on this argument. At first they need to educate people, in other words, they should prevent and after that they should of make patients treatment free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
Doctors everyday warn to people that the root of many di...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, so, thus, while, for instance, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 382.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77486910995 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36840260188 2.80592935109 84% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526178010471 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0223525798 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1052631579 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353466948409 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118249714274 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0676595239352 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215122179854 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467512735846 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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