"Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women aresolely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that theyare also responsible for bringing the children up."

Essay topics:

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. The idea that women are
solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they
are also responsible for bringing the children up."

Parenthood is an important and celebratory milestone in life of an adult and both parents should take equal responsibility and have equal importance in the decision to bring a life into this world and in raising a child. I agree with this statement that only women are held responsible to make this choice of motherhood and they only end up taking the whole responsibility of upbringing of an offspring. This mindset leads to deleterious impact on a child’s physical as well as psychological development and it deprives women of equal opportunities in other aspects of life especially at professional front. This essay shall discuss vitality of involvement of both parents in decision of becoming a parent and in upbringing of child.

Evidence suggests that a growing child needs both of his parents during formative years. absence and negligence of any of the parent can be instrumental in hampering a child’s psychological as well as physical growth. A study conducted by British society of Psychology conducted in Harvard university suggests that a child raised in neglect of any of his parent, whether mother or father, resulted in development of behavioral abnormalities and delay in appearance of growth and developmental milestones in comparison to child who was raised in an environment whether both of his parents took active role in parenting, not only by monetary support but physical presence of both of parents is vital.

Furthermore, by holding mother entirely responsible for birth and upbringing of child, she is being deprived of opportunity to explore other domains of her life such as professional life, which is partial and sexist. For instance, in a recent report approximately 15% women are sacrificing their professional lives due to maternal responsibilities, no such trend was seen in amongst men. This pattern is detrimental for both women, society as well as for whole of the nation, as no nation and society can flourish without involvement of a woman, history has repeatedly taught mankind this lesson.

To sum up with, giving choice of giving birth and upbringing of an offspring should be a shared responsibility for both of the sexes. The mentality of holding only women for this decision can have a negative impact on growth and development of a child and woman are being deprived of right of equal opportunities of life and hence resulting in an unbalanced nation and society.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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Parenthood is an important and celebratory milestone i...
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... of his parents during formative years. absence and negligence of any of the parent can...
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Message: Consider simply using 'of' instead.
Suggestion: of
...formative years. absence and negligence of any of the parent can be instrumental in hampe...
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Suggestion: of
...suggests that a child raised in neglect of any of his parent, whether mother or father, r...
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Line 5, column 441, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
... is detrimental for both women, society as well as for whole of the nation, as no nation a...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in an unbalanced nation and society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, if, so, well, as for, for instance, such as, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2040.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 394.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17766497462 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17213397755 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48730964467 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 655.2 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5173050057 49.4020404114 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.0 106.682146367 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8333333333 20.7667163134 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165237571196 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069591005092 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423606092123 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111831098475 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434195580161 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.0946893788 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 50.2224549098 61% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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