Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extent do you agree with this statement?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence
Entertainment has become an essential part of our routine life. It is argued that government funds should not be utilized in musical or artistic programs. Although governments should support this industry in other forms, I agree that public funds should not be invested for this industry.
Entertainment industry has become self sufficient in the modern era. Artists and musicians are earning a lot because their performance can be viewed from all over the world. Similarly, local stage shows, dramas are also attracting more people in theatres and cinemas which is generating huge revenues. Moreover, artists and musicians are hired by different companies for promotion of their products on high salaries. Furthermore, businessmen investing in building cinema or art facility are getting high rate of return because of increasing public interest. One of my close friend, Ali, is running a musical instrument supply business and he is quite happy with the profits. So, these factors have made entertainment industry self sufficient in terms of financial requirements.
On the other hand, governments should continue their support in some other ways. For instance, artists and the people contributing in music or theatre industry should be encouraged by acknowledging their performace. This could be achieved by holding award ceremonies to recognize their contribution in entertainment industry. Secondly, governments can promote culture by promoting artistic activities, for example by celebrating cultural day at the state level. Authorities can also aware people with the importance of participating in artistic and other entertainment events which will benefit industry and community as well.
Concluding the above discussion, I would say that public funds should not be invested in entertainment industry as this industry is financially self sufficient. However, governments should continue supporting the industry by encouraging artists and promoting their professional work.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.76870748299 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09829407336 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581632653061 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0942555913 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.7647058824 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2941176471 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161818778425 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563991685021 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645647146428 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124902400816 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627569730663 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 50.2224549098 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.89 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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