The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is irrefutable that people with obesity issues are increasing and effecting health care system adversely. Therefore, in order to deal with this problem, some individuals believe that the most appropriate way is the introduction of more physical exercise in school curriculum. Although, more physical lessons will motivate school students to take part in exercise, I believe that government intervention is must to control fatty products in the market.
To begin with, increase in the physical education lessons will definitely benefit the society in overweight issue. More students will be involved with the addition of class, and learners will become aware about the importance of physical workout in their daily life. Precisely, with the outcomes of addition of more classes in school education will encourage more people to take part in exercise. For instance, the addition of yoga in schools at India by the government has made tremendous improvement in health sector especially in young children.
However, strict norms on fast food production is also the supreme way to curb overweight issues. Government rules and regulations on controlling bad quality products can make the society free from unhealthy food items. For example, numerous organizations give bribe to pass quality tests with bad quality products, control with the support of law can limit organizations from manufacturing these unhealthy products. Therefore, unavailability of low grade products can eliminate the risk of overweight issues.
To conclude, while physical education will encourage learners to remain fit and healthy, I believe that government control is must which can eliminate the high fat risk prone food products from the market with implementing strict laws.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...believe that government intervention is must to control fatty products in the market. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60447761194 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8980289005 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55223880597 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4530356749 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.166666667 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25896458083 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102780072569 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859498219156 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15797172475 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106176225044 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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