The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Treating heath related problems associated with the increasing number of obese people is putting stress on the health care system so it is often thought by some that supplementing school syllabus with lectures exclusively on physical education is the most effective way to address this issue. In my opinion, I think that besides altering school courses other alternatives should also be inducted at work places.
It is understandable that introducing physical activity classes in schools will help to instill its significance in the younger generation of the society which will benefit their academic progress as well. In other words, an active and healthy student can take keen interest in other subject also which will ultimately secure better grades in the academics. By introducing physical lessons children will benefit from refraining from activities which are detrimental for both their physical and mental health.
Another point to consider is that although exercise habits can better be adopted at a developing age but the problem of being overweight transcends the schools to grown adults as well. This is owing to the fact that almost two in three adults are found overweight in the USA alone. Therefore, exercise regimes should also be initiated at workplaces alongside schools so that it enables the adults of society lead a healthier lifestyle and be more productive in their professional lives.
Finally, in order to target the wider population awareness campaigns should be started at state level. Media platforms can be used to explicitly showcase health risks associated with obesity and rewards of leading a healthier lifestyle. These steps would certainly help to ameliorate the strain on already stretched health care facilities by creating awareness among all members of the community.
In conclusion, the idea of inducting physical lessons in schools will certainly help youngsters to lead a healthy routine but to raise awareness among other demographics of the society educational and exercise campaigns should be encouraged at a state and corporate level.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, if, so, still, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47692307692 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84122817014 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572307692308 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7659788025 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.333333333 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0833333333 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201616296389 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702676037727 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850011833424 0.0667982634062 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109467507904 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0845843515183 0.056905535591 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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