The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Owing to the problems which a growing population of overweight people cause to the health care system, some people believe that the key to resolve this issue depends on introducing more sports and exercises in schools. I completely agree with this as this is the best way to tackle the deteriorating of health problems in relation to the weight.
To begin with, dealing with the increasing number of overweight persons could be reduced drastically by having sport and exercise right from the school levels and it must be a long-term approach. At the moment, in most of the countries we have sport activities in schools twice a week which is not enough to counteract the causes occurring as a result of sedentary lifestyle. However, Regular physical activities in schools could possible decrease the overweight of the students right from the beginning.
Another point is that, sports should be indulged in academic lessons so that children would not feel it as an extra work to be carried out. This idea will enable the parents also to take part in extracurricular activities along with their kids and they will also stay fit and will act as an apt illustration for the future generation which will benefit both the public and their own society in long terms.
To conclude , the issues arousing because of the obese people could possible be avoided by indulging more sport activities in schools which will help the younger generation to reach the pinnacle in their lives at a greater extend.
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Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98412698413 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66468834635 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587301587302 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.0832611207 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.0 106.682146367 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267761963326 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115510200156 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11167691817 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162331622134 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150476683825 0.056905535591 264% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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