The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the

These days, the health care industry putting strives to tackle the problem of obesity around young people which is a prominent issue in all other health-related defects. The foremost cause of this problem proliferating among folks is due to the hectic lifestyle and also keeping the least care of exercise. Still, some masses' believe that conducting physical training such as a drill, yoga as well as self-defensive arts in the institution would solve the problems in terms of weight. I completely agree that subjects in physical as a curriculum to pupils at an early age would be the best option to take cautions on their weight gaining.

On the one hand, a recent survey by healthcare and Administration illustrates the elevated rate of obesity and the difficulty of handling the plenty of people who have affected by that issue. Based on the fact, the officials make the statement to keep physical education compulsory for all schools. As a result, pupils who have entailed themselves for sports and exercises in schools perform effectively than those who have not taken part in such events. For instance, scientists constantly noticing the brain activity of young folks who have played after study would not gain much weight as the thesis claims.

In other words, researchers unveiled the advantages of getting involved in training at an early age that would impact positively when they become adolescents. Moreover, sports like football, cricket, and baseball play a vital role in ameliorating the memory power as well as make them fit, and also short exercises such as yoga, karate would prevent them from starving. A good example of this is that student who plays often would not entail in the unhealthy habits like eating snacks and playing games which obviously avert from getting immense cholesterol in their body.

To put it in a nutshell, implementing physical education to pupils as a curriculum would ameliorate the habit of keeping them fit always.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'often' is usually put before the verb 'plays'.
Suggestion: often plays
...ood example of this is that student who plays often would not entail in the unhealthy habit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, so, still, well, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10835913313 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74474574274 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 28.3562407397 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 137.5 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9166666667 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136222066674 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0509225861236 0.084324248473 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537052924964 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0833212684049 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701089279341 0.056905535591 123% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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