The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the healthcare system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with is to introduce physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The proliferation of obese people in society is a growing concern for health management systems. Some believe that the introduction of physical education and sport activities to school curriculum as a means to tackle this problem. In my opinion, I consider this as the most effective and immediate method to start working on bringing down the number of people with fat issues to a normal level.
A good reason for the inclusion of physical education and sports to school curriculum is that it helps to bring up the quintessential next generation healthy. At the moment, half of the school children in India are under-exercised, as per the latest UNICEF report. Mandating physical exercises and extra-curricular activities at the school level, gives young students access to fitness facilities such as gyms, game grounds and health clubs. Making use of these utilities, the younger portion of the society can grow up instilling a healthy culture.
Another benefit of the introduction of sportings and exercises in schools is the parallel participation of parents into these activities. Bringing their children into these events, in fact, helps make parents aware of the necessity to maintain a sound body and gradually this would lead them to develop a habit of keeping themselves fit for life. Thus the successful implementation of physical education into the school studies eventually helps transfer the fitness culture to different sectors of the population.
In conclusion, the attainment of societal fitness and a healthy lifestyle can be achieved to a great extent by properly implementing fitness education and sports into the school curriculum. The cooperation and participation of other sections of the community further inspire and make the entire society fit, leaving their otherwise sedentary life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...bit of keeping themselves fit for life. Thus the successful implementation of physic...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, thus, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41901408451 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06481874921 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566901408451 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3478093567 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.25 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167295310435 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635248261323 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048519283579 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10660302847 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806212315806 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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