The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the healthcare system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with is to introduce physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays the over-weighted population has been increased due to affluent amount of foods, and it gives more burden to health care system. many people argue that people need to be taught how to keep their body healthy by having class in school while others while others assume it is waste of time and budget for education. I absolutely agree with providing useful class to people; the following essay will explain about the reasons.
To begin with, it is fact that offering more health care lecture requires considerable amount of expense such as teacher's wage, rent fee and study materials. increased tax rate can be expected to cover the new cost, but it is only for short-term point of view. When the government does not pay attention to the current issue, more expense for medical service would be required caused by overweight people in the future.
The main reason why people get overly weight is because they do not recognize the consequence. they have no idea what type of illness they may have with their diet, so almost no effort of having balanced diet is made. Besides that, many of them are also not familiar with nutrition. That is why many adolescents prefer fast food rather than slow meal. The problem is that not only for students, but also parents are the same. If they learned regards physical aspects, they might put more stress on their menu.
In conclusion, introducing physical education have more benefits in the long-term. students will have healthier life style with the investment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, may, so, while, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.953125 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43708680392 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.65234375 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 388.8 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9223158683 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5714285714 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158194085368 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489321299291 0.084324248473 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0289920098189 0.0667982634062 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944457863001 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174099374138 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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