It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future Do you think it is a positive or negative development

The demographic trends of many developed countries show a steadily increase of the older population. Research carried out in several countries have shown that the percentage of the geriatric population is growing at an unprecedented rate and that by 2050 nearly 17% of the world population will be aged 65 and over. The increasing in aging population presents many benefits but also tough challenges our healthcare system should be prepared for. Life expectancy has dramatically increased in the last decades due to deep improvements in medicine, science and nutrition. People these days live longer, though it does not automatically mean that they live healthier. In this essay I will briefly discuss the benefits and the drawbacks of this phenomen and explain why I think that this situation has a negative impact on our society.

On one hand, many claim that a contry with a high percentage of older people cold have an edge over other nations. To underpin this statement they say that the skills and the knowledge gained by the older generations are an invaluable treasure younger people should take advantage of. Furthermore, since nowadays women have regular jobs too, they play a pivotal role in taking care of children while both parents are at work. In addition to this positive aspects, seniors can teach us a lot from the lessons and from the mistakes of the past, so that we can avoid to make the same mistakes and build a more equal and stronger society.

All these rather brigt aspects should not however make us bilnd of the fact that several disadvantages are linked to an high percentage of older people. In the first place, people who live longer does not necessary live better. Many diseases typical of the old age age, like Alzheimer or Parkinsons, were virtually unknown some decades ago. Sedentary life has become commonplace these days, not only among the youngsters but it affects the elderly as well. Obesity, cardiovascular diseases, hypertension, osteoporosis are only some of the most widespread illnesses that affect people over their 60. Governments have therefore to face up soaring health care spending, accomplishing this effort by raising taxes. Another consequence of population aging is the detrimental effect on the public deficit. Many economic experts warn that if no actions are taken to curb the spending, a lot of countries will have to reckon with recession and financial hardhips.

To conclude, I beleive that governments should take actions in order to avert a financial disaster due to uncontrolled healthcare and pension spending.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('steadily') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...trends of many developed countries show a steadily increase of the older population. Research carri...
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Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'many claims'.
Suggestion: many claims
... impact on our society. On one hand, many claim that a contry with a high percentage of...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...hat several disadvantages are linked to an high percentage of older people. In the...
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Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: age
...etter. Many diseases typical of the old age age, like Alzheimer or Parkinsons, were vir...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in addition, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14489311164 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81634899186 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591448931116 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7428738827 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18693804783 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500235150021 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439011769716 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949030118315 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652961875648 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 57, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('steadily') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...trends of many developed countries show a steadily increase of the older population. Research carri...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'many claims'.
Suggestion: many claims
... impact on our society. On one hand, many claim that a contry with a high percentage of...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 118, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...hat several disadvantages are linked to an high percentage of older people. In the...
^^
Line 5, column 262, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: age
...etter. Many diseases typical of the old age age, like Alzheimer or Parkinsons, were vir...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, i think, in addition, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 421.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14489311164 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81634899186 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591448931116 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 506.74238477 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7428738827 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1578947368 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36842105263 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18693804783 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500235150021 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439011769716 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949030118315 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0652961875648 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.