It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be.
Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest new families could be brought close. Include any relevant examples from your experience.
The family is the most important part in the society. Actually the relationship among the family members are the most powerful tool in their day today life. However nowadays, has huge problem related with family bond.
First of all, the main problem is financial problems because so many families are try to earn more money for their life. Therefor they try to find good jobs without concerning their family life. As a result of that, they have to tackle more and more with cut time limitation and no enough time to spend with their lovers. In my experience one good illustration of this is, my father is a business man therefore most of the time he engaged with the business and going outstation. Therefore no enough time to spend with us. This is a huge problem in our family because we cannot build up our relationship properly.
Secondly, in this decade, the technology are rapidly increasing hence people try to engage with the technology. For an example the smart phones are directly affect the family relationship. Because currently have so many applications to chat with unknown people like Facebook, Skype, Viber and so on.
Actually now is the time to build up our family, unity as a proper way. In my perspective we should allocate a fix time to communicate with the family members and discuss about the problems in every day. However this is time for close each other and enjoy well by playing Tennis, cricket and so on.
In conclusion, although financially stability is most important part in the modern society, it would not be appropriate for build up our family relationship. Therefore I believe every time should be tried to keep up our relationship with strong.
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Essay evaluation report
However nowadays, has huge problem related with family bond.
However nowadays, it has a huge problem related with family bond.
because so many families are try to earn
because so many families are trying to earn
the technology are rapidly increasing
the technology is rapidly increasing
smart phones are directly affect the family relationship
smart phones are directly affecting the family relationship
is most important part
is the most important part
for build up our family relationship.
for building up our family relationship.
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2 //you have grammatical issues. Read a good grammar book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 289 350
No. of Characters: 1358 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.123 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 65 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.688 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.576 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... powerful tool in their day today life. However nowadays, has huge problem related with...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...with the business and going outstation. Therefore no enough time to spend with us. This i...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: ANINFOR_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'in everyday'?
Suggestion: in everyday
... members and discuss about the problems in every day. However this is time for close each ot...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 205, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...iscuss about the problems in every day. However this is time for close each other and e...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...e for build up our family relationship. Therefore I believe every time should be tried to...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 247, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o keep up our relationship with strong.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8615916955 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64009532542 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515570934256 0.561755894193 92% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.6947717057 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.6470588235 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82352941176 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124221294018 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482130528736 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321772940257 0.0667982634062 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0782309067266 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158157775256 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.61 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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