In many cities, security measures, such as the use of video cameras in public
places, are being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe
that these measures restrict our individual freedom.
Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
Certain individuals in various cities assert that cameras installed for the purpose of security lead to the compromise of ones freedom. If asked, I strongly opine that the problems emerged from such thinking would be more as compared to any benefit it might bring.
To begin with, the foremost negative aspect of this behavior is increase in crime rate.With the attitude of reducing cameras in places like parks and shopping malls, the chances of robbery will be increasing. For example, as per the Ahmedabad city police high resolution cameras installed on the gates of Law garden has made a reduction of crime by 50% not only inside the garden but also at the nearby area.
In addition, it will also lead to rise in the number of accidents on the road. Since the data accumulated by the videography on various cross-road would not be available, the accident pattern might not be studied. Therefore the risk of accidents would be high on the roads. Hence, eluding the usage of cameras for the shake of loss of freedom can be detrimental.
However, government could save some amount of grant by such belief. If the citizens do not permits the usage of cameras, the authorities does not require to spend on it’s purchasing and installing. Along with this the maintenance cost could be also abolished. This saving either can be used for road development or for refurbishment of drainage for betterment of society.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that increase in offensive activities and cases of accidents because of humans thought of loosing of ones autonomy by fixing of cameras on the places of public outweigh the positive aspect of saving of money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1402.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00714285714 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70103674351 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578571428571 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.454935686 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.846153846 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1874754963 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611511078429 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327848447232 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0953418040047 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209529846555 0.056905535591 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.