Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think that they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Essay topics:

Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think that they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is perceived by some that children should leave their home after reaching a certain age, while others think they must live with their family. In my opinion, though being with family is important for the reason that it helps in maintaining the relationship, individuals cannot become responsible if they are allowed to stay at their parents’ house forever, and hence both of them are equally important.

To commence with, those who stay with their parents, generally have a better and healthy relationship with them. In other words, they are more connected to their parents as they share their joy, as well as problems with them. This enables them with solutions and certain expertise provided by their elders, which they do not possess, which eventually helps them to take vital decisions in a better way. Moreover, living together help the parents to pass their time during their old age in an efficient manner. With children around, they are more relaxed and their happiness quotient is high. To exemplify, recent research by Oxford University revealed that people in Scotland are welcoming the idea of a joint family as they believe it would help all the family members to stay connected and not feel deprived.

Having said that, in order to be responsible, humans need to get out of their comfort zone. Getting away from their parents’ house not only makes them a responsible citizen, but also helps them to realise the value of their ancestral home. Furthermore, it helps them to acknowledge the fact that to be successful, you have to earn money and build your own home. It also provides these individuals with perks of privacy. To exemplify, people in USA follow the system of leaving their maternal home when they are 18 years of age, and along with success in their life, they are blessed with their privacy, which has proved to be a matter of concern these days. Else, with all the facilities, they may not be willing to do hard work, and this can result in bad relationships with their family members.

To conclude, I believe, both systems are equally important at their own part. While one provides you with better relationship with your parents, other helps you to become successful in your life. It is up to the family that what type of system they want to pursue.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, as well as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 24.0651302605 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1615.20841683 119% => OK
No of words: 392.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89285714286 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52985994208 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52806122449 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9948691204 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.823529412 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0588235294 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278911651992 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101718437715 0.084324248473 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661348439921 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208651758998 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601577003203 0.056905535591 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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