Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think that they should stay at home with the family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is perceived by some that children should leave their home after reaching a certain age, while others think they must live with their family. In my opinion, though being with family is important for the reason that it helps in maintaining the relationship, individuals cannot become responsible if they are allowed to stay at their parents’ house forever.
To commence with, those who stay with their parents, generally have a better and healthy relationship with them. In other words, they are more connected to their parents as they share their joy, as well as problems with them. This enables them with solutions and certain expertise provided by their elders, which they do not possess, which eventually helps them to take vital decisions in a better way. Moreover, living together help the parents to pass their time during their old age in an efficient manner. With children around, they are more relaxed and their happiness quotient is high. To exemplify, recent research by Oxford University revealed that people in Scotland are welcoming the idea of a joint family as they believe it would help all the family members to stay connected and not feel deprived.
Having said that, in order to be responsible, humans need to get out of their comfort zone. Getting away from their parents’ house not only makes them a responsible citizen, but also helps them to realise the value of their ancestral home. Furthermore, it helps them to acknowledge the fact that to be successful, you have to earn money and build your own home. It also provides these individuals with perks of privacy. To exemplify, people in USA follow the system of leaving their maternal home when they are 18 years of age, and along with success in their life, they are blessed with their privacy, which has proved to be a matter of concern these days. Else, with all the facilities, they may not be willing to do hard work, and this can result in bad relationships with their family members.
To conclude, no one can deny that living with parents provides you with better relationship with your parents. But according to me, to be successful, one needs to leave their home when they become mature enough. Hence, people should follow the concept of asking their children to go away when they become older and children should accept this as an important challenge in their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, as well as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 24.0651302605 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1615.20841683 123% => OK
No of words: 402.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92786069652 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51254617765 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517412935323 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8697958668 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.529411765 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6470588235 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287795602655 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110426808777 0.084324248473 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691809386784 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223978689464 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627687912506 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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