Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children To what extent do you agree You should write at least 250 words | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

To what extent do you agree?

You should write at least 250 words.

Undoubtedly, a few portion of the populace vocalize that broadcasting by media about the famous personalities endow the adverse influence on children. However, I disagree with the given statement because the life of star always inspire the young ones by persuading them to work hard and philanthropic gestuers by celebrities instill the virtues of noble citizen.

Since media deeply depicts about the lifestyle, act, wealth and habits of renowned person, thus this stardom acts as motivational factors for children. Seemingly, wavering minds easily get attract towards the great celebrities and they embark to imitate the moves of their favorite star. Consequently, they develop their hidden talents and turn to be versatile personalities. Also, it is biased to overlook the facts published by BBC that undue press coverage to the life of legendary cricketer named 'Sachin Tendulkar' have motivated to million of children to choose sports as career in India. Therefore, ultra luxurious allures the children to intensify their efforts in order to thrive.

On the top of that, even though celebrities spend lavish on unproductive things, some stars donate a major chunk of their income for the benefits of underprivileged people and devote hefty time in social activities. Indeed, their acts, songs, films ,social works always set an examples in front of humanities and inspire children to work for the welfare of deprived people. To exemplify,as per the report stated by ' The New York Times' in the gone calendar year, charitable activities by the famous Hollywood Star named
Tom Cruise has encouraged the children to donate their pocket money to the flood victims in the U.S.A.

In conclusion, although exposure about the life of renowned persons promotes negative concerns among children , it turns them into industrious personalities. Observing the life of favorite star would inculcate the habit of social helper among children

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 13.1623246493 15% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41390728477 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83711696023 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.64238410596 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.1439468818 49.4020404114 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.636363636 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4545454545 20.7667163134 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27272727273 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0997956540421 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0366745910136 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.018352428085 0.0667982634062 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0524961217197 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165719525528 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, look, so, still, therefore, thus, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments