Many researchers believe that we can now study the behaviour of children to see if they will grow up to be criminals, while others disagree.
To what extent do you think crime is determined by genetics?
Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?
While it is believed by a few researchers that studying children’s behaviour helps to predict whether or not they will commit crimes when they grow up, some do not agree with this viewpoint. In my opinion, the casuation of crime is not related to gene and DNA rather attributed to poverty and environment. Many steps can be taken to deter children from turning into offenders in their adult life.
For on thing, we should remember that genes of people does not compel them to offend. If this was the case, every miscreant’s children would be akin to them. I think the primary factor why people commit crimes is the situation in which people live. Historically, people from poverty-stricken areas are more prone to commiting crimes because they do not have legitimate jobs that enables them finanical stability. Another major reason is surroundings. People residing in areas where crimes take place on daily basis seems to make people fearless towards crimes. They feel the act of perpetration is justified and normal since everyone around them is involved in some or many kinds of law-breaking activities. By getting influenced from such criminals people participate in breaking laws.
Children can be molded into law-abiding citizens as they are still in an impressionable age. The first measure ought to be taken by government to ensure that every children is provided with free and quality education, irrespective of their family background. This will ensure that they become an erudite adult and have job security, so they can rise from poverty. Having a proper job to meet the necessities of lives will act as a deterrent to crime. Secondly, children’s whose parents have criminal records should be under social service supervision. Having a regular check-up will help to keep a tab on them so they do not go astray. This will result in children growing up in safe and protected environment where no one can force them to follow the path of their parents. The more the support from government agencies, the safer the juvenile can be brought up.
In conclusion, the main causes of crime are destitue conditions and abysmal environment. However, counter-measures such as education and survelliance of children will possibly ensure that they are safe and do not grow up to be criminals. In my view, the government plays a major role in tackling this problem of delinquencies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1998.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0582278481 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89070692194 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562025316456 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8392012621 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8181818182 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9545454545 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.40909090909 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366750976895 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978792130727 0.084324248473 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855481356923 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237875948489 0.151304729494 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0883675095615 0.056905535591 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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